Task 8

NOTES TECHNIQUES OF EDITING AND REVISING A PARAGRAPH. 

STEP 1 (Free Writing) before editing.

My Grandmother

  My grandmother. She was a good cook. The best cook. Every weekend we have a big dinner. With big, big, bowls of food. Lots of talking. Everybody in the family there. Every time we eat the same food, but we always love it. Is our favorite meal. She never mad at us. She always defends us when we are in trouble with our parents. One time I picked all the roses in her garden. She not even mad then. Grandmother kind and generous. She gives food to poor people. She never makes them feel bad about taking it. Makes people feel good, just as she made me feel good when I picked all the roses. Thanked me for the beautiful bouquet. Mother really angry. Grandmother always forgives. Forgiving heart.

STEP 1 (Free Writing) after editing.

My Grandmother

  My grandmother. She was a good cook. The best cook. Every weekend we have a big dinner. With big, big, bowls of food. Lots of talking. Everybody in the family there. Every time we eat the same food, but we always love it. Is our favorite meal. She never mad at us. She always defends us when we are in trouble with our parents. One time I picked all the roses in her garden. She not even mad then. [Grandmother kind and generous.] She gives food to poor people. She never makes them feel bad about taking it. Makes people feel good, just as she made me feel good when I picked all the roses. Thanked me for the beautiful bouquet. Mother really angry. Grandmother always forgives. Forgiving heart.

STEP 2 (Write the first draft)

• Write your paragraph in rough form.
• Don’t worry about the errors.

My Grandmother

        My grandmother kind and generous. She never mad at us. She always makes people feel good. One time I picked all the roses in her garden. She not mad even then. She made me feel good. Thanked me for the beautiful bouquet. Grandmother gives food to poor people. She never makes them feel bad about taking it. Makes people feel good, just as she made me feel good when I picked all the roses. Grandmother always forgive. Forgiving heart.

STEP 3 (Edit the first draft)

• This is when you start to edit the 1^st draft.
• You need to check & make changes & corrections.
• There are 2 steps:
• STEP   A
• You check the paragraph as a whole.
• Is the meaning clear?
• STEP   B
• Check the paragraph for good form, organization, grammar, punctuation, spelling & etc.
  

STEP 4 (Write the final copy)

•  You write a neat final copy of your paragraph to hand in to your lecturer.

My Grandmother.

        My grandmother is kind and generous. She always makes people feel good. One time, I picked all the roses in her garden. She wasn’t mad even then. She thanked me for giving her a beautiful bouquet. Grandmother also gives food to poor people. She never makes them feel bad about taking it. She makes them feel good, just as she made me feel good when I picked all the roses. I will always remember my grandmother’s kindness and generosity. 

"The Pursuit of Happyness"

The Pursuit of Happyness, is story about a Chris Gardner is a bright and talented but marginally employed salesman. Besides, Chris Gardner is a family man struggling. Despite his valiant attempts to help keep the family afloat, while his wife Thandie Newton and his five years old son named as a Christopher is buckling under the constant strain of financial pressure. No longer able to cope, she reluctantly decides to leave. After his wife leaved him, Chris became a single father, continues doggedly to pursue a better paying job using every sales skill he knows. He lands an internship at a prestigious stock brokerage firm, and although there is no salary, he accepts, hopeful he will end the program with a job and a promising future. Without a financial cushion, Chris and his son are soon evicted from their apartment and forced to sleep in shelters, bus stations, bathrooms, or wherever they can find refuge for the night. Therefore, to despite his troubles, Chris continues to honor his commitment as a loving and caring father, using the affection and trust his son has placed in him as an impetus to overcome the obstacles he faces. If i were a main character in this story, I'll never ever give up to build up my family happiness. I want my family get a blast happiness beside me. I will always try my best in order to give a comfortable life for my family. Moreover, if i in his situation, I will use all my knowledge to some useful job, and establish some business that could help me to change my life and my family.